In the original paragraph, couldn't it be interpreted as her thinking she needs to stop, but then almost giving in anyhow, and then quickly putting a stop to it before she can completely give in? Like a back and forth kind of thing? "I love it, but sadly, this can't happen. But it feels so nice and... No! I can't!" ...It might not be the clearest thing still. But I could see myself trying to write a character going back and forth with a decision (which would be chronological order the way I would picture it happening). Should I avoid mental conversations like that, and only write characters going straight to their decisions? Or is it just a matter of clarity, and I just need to make sure the wavering is written correctly, so it won't be missing pieces and sound out of order?
I'm kind of confused about why you ended up with the paragraph you ended up with. I guess it's just me. Maybe I'm not thinking about it in the right way. So... I'm going to kind of think out loud about it.
You say proper chronological order is 1. Show, 2. What, 3. Why, and 4. Resolve.
You say that 1. is that she wanted to let him to do stuff, but she stopped him, and that 2. is that she wanted his mouth on her flesh but her soul told her to stop. But, when you wrote out the paragraph correctly, you wrote it as 2. 1. 3. 4. Isn't this contradicting the chronological order you had said?
Comparing the two versions in Word Starter with highlighing, it looks like you have the paragraph arranged like, A. Happy, non-conflict thoughts, B. she wants it but. C. she wants it but. D. why she can't. Okay, that's clear enough. In the tutorial, you referred to A. as "She reacted, and wanted more", while B. and C. are the "What" and "Show" ones, respectively (but they both sound alike to me), and D. is both "Why" and "Resolve" (to me, it looks like telling it, and then telling it again with more detail).
But, I also noticed, when I had compared them line by line, that you had switched the order of two sets of lines from the first version of the paragraph. - And these sets seem to be in the same categories, so it doesn't look like it has anything to do with which parts of the paragraph come first.
First: "I am overcome, overcome by a desire I know only he can satisfy... He fired her blood more than any other man." became "He fired her blood more than any other man. I am overcome, overcome by a desire I know only he can satisfy..."
Second: "She wanted to let him . . . but set her palm over his to stop him. . . . The fear in her soul told her to stop, and yet her body begged for his mouth on her flesh." vs "Her body begged for his mouth on her flesh, and yet, the fear in her soul told her to stop. She wanted to let him . . . but set her palm over his to stop him. . . ."
Third: (this is a reordering of two pieces of the same line) "The fear in her soul told her to stop, and yet her body begged for his mouth on her flesh." vs "Her body begged for his mouth on her flesh, and yet, the fear in her soul told her to stop."
The second switch is the Show/What and What/Show thing I had already mentioned. For the first and third switches, it looks like you just switch them without actively mentioning why.
I'm going to attempt to explain the switches by it having to do with what you said about Internalization and Dialogue happening after Physical Reactions. So... first, he fires her blood, and then she thinks about desiring him? (but if you hadn't switched it, I could've said that she was overcome by her desire, and then she thought about him firing up her blood more than other men, so I don't think I get it). She first... uh... she felt the urge to stop, and then put her palm over his...? But that puts her action after her thoughts, which is backwards from your warning. (...but if physical reactions always happen first, then wouldn't she have turned away and said no before thinking about not being able to do this, too? and I'm pretty sure I do think before acting a few times, even though I do act before thinking most often) But for the last switch, I'm thinking you probably reworded that sentence to put the con before the pro- oh wait. No. her body begging for his flesh sounds like a pro, and the fear in her soul sounds like a con. So that doesn't work, either. :/ I'm totally confused by everything. Am I missing something really obvious? Thinking way off on the wrong track? Can you explain those three changes in really simple words for me to understand? T_T This tutorial just seems to go over my head. It looks like a lot of others understand it just fine, though. I guess it might be something about how you worded things that just doesn't click with the way I think. ...and the more I try to figure it out, the more confused I get. I think you might have some good advice, but I just don't quite understand it.