WHY is "As" so Evil?
"As" is one of the most common mistakes in fiction writing--and the most difficult bad habit to lose--BECAUSE it works with the way we speak --> Equation
Character + Character = Action/Impact > (which is greater than) Setting.
--> Jack + Betty = Laughed > (which is more important than) they ate.
Jack and Betty laughed as
This is not only how we Speak, it's how reports and all other non-fiction are supposed to be written, so it's how we are taught to write in School.
However, this is NOT how STORIES are written. Stories are written in Domino Effect
1 and 2 caused 3 and 4 caused 5 and 6 caused 7 and 8.
This happened, which triggered this, which caused this, which resulted in this...
--> Jack and Betty happened, which made them eat, which caused them to laugh.
Jack and Betty ate and laughed.
It's a simple case of Writing what we're used to Hearing. However it's also one of the ways that editors use to judge the skill of a writer.
In other words...
-- Equation Form Writing = AMATEUR
For more information on The Evil "As" and why it's so bad, go Here: Basic Sentence Structure for FICTION
. Read that.
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